I was raised in a home that constantly had papers to grade, parent phone calls to make, and lesson plans to be designed. I have seen the good, the bad and the ugly of education and still I pursue a degree in English education with all my heart. Both of my parents, RETIRED AFTER 30 YEARS IN THE FIELD [past participle], worked in the public education system, as do many of their friends. Through these connections I have been offered a backstage pass to see the late nights, the lost causes, the love of seeing a student succeed, and the amount of responsibility that is placed on a teacher to educate a child.
It is my belief that young adults-- THE FUTURE OF AMERICA-- [appositive] are not given enough credit for their creativity, passion, and energy that can be put into the classroom. Their energy and youthful enthusiasm, DRIVING THEIR CREATIVE OUTPUT [present participle], can really make a change in the classroom, school atmosphere, or community at large. By giving them opportunities to discover themselves, relate to the world around them, and connect with people on a peer level, students can blossom into active, healthy, successful adults: CONTRIBUTING MEMBERS OF SOCIETY [appositive].
I am passionate about both my content areas of English and theater and I enjoy working with people of all abilities and ages. I aim to encourage students to try something new, push the boundaries of what they know, and use classroom activities to enhance their education not only about literature or drama, but also about themselves. I will bring enthusiasm, knowledge, and the ability to listen to my classroom. I will provide fun, encouragement, and a positive attitude to my school (A COMMUNITY IN ITSELF) [appositive]. I will add experience, leadership, and involvement to the community I live in.
My classroom, COMFORTING AND WARM, [adjectives out of order] will be a safe place for students of all backgrounds. Literature and drama, THE STORIES OF GENERATIONS PAST AND PRESENT, [appositive] can relate to students on a very personal and emotional level, and I will attempt to give them an outlet for sharing and contributing to classroom discussions. My classroom will not only be a place of learning, but a place of love. I hope to provide them with encouragement and care that they may not receive at home, and I hope to push them further than they every thought was possible. I want to believe make my students that it is possible for them to dream.
All of your appositives look right to me! Though I had trouble with adding appositives to mine, they seem to flow well with the rest of your piece and I'm not sure if that's because you used a more "creative" piece than what I chose (I ended up selecting the paper we wrote in T&L 465) or because I just am not that great at using them. I really had trouble figuring out when to randomly add them to my piece, but they definitely seemed to fit with the overall feel of your piece!
ReplyDeleteI really liked the placement of your appositives! For the most part, people have been sticking with identifying something, then putting in the appositive, and then the rest of the sentence. However, you were able to place them even later in the sentence, and they still flowed nicely in the piece. I think that it really shows your strength as a writer because it shows how eloquently your phrases flow. I was really impressed withh this piece.
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ReplyDeleteKaty! Great job! I love that your parents took the 30-year retirement thing! They must be either really bored, or having tons of fun! Your examples all look stunning! Good job!
ReplyDeleteyes,all correct--and effective.
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